Reflection
She stood on the street
With a cigarette.
The air, their hands - cold and numb
Beneath the gray blanket.
The flaxened adulteress tempts him
To be the first to taste her vintage.
It is her traitorous lips that bleed
Him from the inside
While outside he drowns
In her designer misery.
All he wants is her
Affection.
She wants the same thing
From her reflection,
Expects a smile,
Finds only tears.
With a cigarette.
The air, their hands - cold and numb
Beneath the gray blanket.
The flaxened adulteress tempts him
To be the first to taste her vintage.
It is her traitorous lips that bleed
Him from the inside
While outside he drowns
In her designer misery.
All he wants is her
Affection.
She wants the same thing
From her reflection,
Expects a smile,
Finds only tears.
5 Comments:
Lovely as always - though the ending is a touch week. Maybe cut out the last two lines.
L.
By Anonymous, at September 21, 2005 5:27 PM
Thanks for the kind words. The ending is a touch weaker than I'd like, probably because it seems a bit cliched. Shame you won't be at my party though...
By Yuki, at September 21, 2005 8:52 PM
*sniffiles with cliche love and southen accent* but i'll always be in your heart.
L.
By Anonymous, at September 21, 2005 9:08 PM
=)
By Yuki, at September 21, 2005 9:54 PM
lol heys =P
it's nice...apart from the fact i don't understand it that much =P
hehehe...i especially like the line about looking for affection in her own reflection...and smoking is bad for you! >___<
yups the last two lines are kinda cliche but who cares!
blahh...cya!
By Anonymous, at September 21, 2005 10:05 PM
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