Interactive Post
At Libby's request, I will post two slightly different versions of the same poem. Your job, as faithful blog readers, will be to vote on which one you think is the better one. If you've got any other suggestions or alterations you'd like to make, i'd be more than glad to take those into consideration also. Anyway, here goes:
version 1:
my darling onion,
everytime i cut you
it puts me in tears
version 2:
my darling onion,
everytime i cut you
it brings me to tears
version 1:
my darling onion,
everytime i cut you
it puts me in tears
version 2:
my darling onion,
everytime i cut you
it brings me to tears
posted by Yuki at
6:49 PM
6 Comments:
how about changing "cut" to "eat" and using "you bring me to tears" akaka.
By
εïз (c h i l l y), at April 13, 2005 6:39 PM
hahaha! I think that'd be innuendo. Can't have that now can we?
By
Yuki, at April 13, 2005 6:47 PM
One vote for Libby!
L.
By
Anonymous, at April 13, 2005 8:57 PM
from msn convos, the score is currently 3-3 (including your vote and mine). It's not over yet!
By
Yuki, at April 14, 2005 10:17 AM
*grumbles* I should try putting it into MSN convos... but then I try not to subject my friends to poetry over MSN. *grumbles* VOTE 1 for LIBBY!
L.
By
Anonymous, at April 14, 2005 1:50 PM
That's the good thing about haiku. Victims are only subjected to 3 lines of torture.
By
Yuki, at April 15, 2005 7:30 PM
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